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Band 4.5CEFR B1297 words

IN SOME COUNTRIES, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE BECOMING INTERESTED IN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE OR BUILDING THEY LINE IN. WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN PEOPLE RESEARCH THIS?

The response addresses both parts of the prompt with relevant ideas, but the organization is loose and repetitive, lacking clear paragraph progression. Lexical range is limited,...

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Prompt

IN SOME COUNTRIES, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE BECOMING INTERESTED IN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE OR BUILDING THEY LINE IN. WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN PEOPLE RESEARCH THIS?

Essay review

Annotated essay

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There are many houses that have been standing for numerous years. These historic buildings additionally serve as a reminder of how many people resided in them and what kind of taste do those people carried , and for what purpose does the house was constructed , and also whether it serves only as a housing for people or it carries other secrets with it. These old dwellings also describe how individuals have used the old equipment.

Today, many people have become interested in finding out the history of their homes or if they are purchasing an old residence. The reasons could be that they wanted to discover about their forefathers, where they originated from , and why did they built the house in this location. Moreover, how many materials are utilised in the dwelling. Furthermore, what kind of technologies have been utilised in the building to carry out daily life tasks.

Folks can research about their residence by asking around the neighbourhood additionally they can go to the city centre and research their family tree if they have lived there for generations. However, if they are new to the premises, they can research about the initial owner of the dwelling , which can give an idea of how old it is. On the other hand, research can be done online because of technological advancements and this could also help to know about the amount of renovations does the house has undergone.

In conclusion, this is regarded as a personal interest if people want to know about the history of their resting building or place and can use tools that allow them to totally understand about the materials. As new technologies are arriving, there may be a time when folks can check about their home by scanning them.

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Band & CEFR

Band 4.5

CEFR B1 · High

Assessment summary

The response addresses both parts of the prompt with relevant ideas, but the organization is loose and repetitive, lacking clear paragraph progression. Lexical range is limited, with frequent reliance on basic words and informal conversational expressions ('Folks'). Grammatical control is weak, characterized by repeated tense shifts, frequent errors in interrogative word order used as noun clauses, and punctuation issues such as comma splices.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 5.0

Strengths

Both parts of the prompt (reasons for interest and how to research) are addressed.
A recognizable position is maintained throughout the essay.

Weaknesses

Ideas are underdeveloped and presented as a list of questions rather than fully elaborated arguments.
The response relies heavily on vague phrasing and speculation.

The writer addresses the two task questions, meeting the basic requirements for Band 5.0, but the discussion lacks depth, logical extension, and concrete examples.

Coherence & Cohesion 4.5

Strengths

Basic paragraph divisions separate the introduction, body points, and conclusion.

Weaknesses

Paragraphs lack clear controlling topics and tend to list disparate points without smooth progression.
Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inappropriately (e.g., 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand').

Overall progression is impeded by disjointed sentences and repetitive sentence-initial connectors, leading to a choppy reading experience characteristic of Band 4.5.

Lexical Resource 4.5

Strengths

Attempts to incorporate topic-related vocabulary such as 'historic buildings', 'dwellings', 'renovations', and 'forefathers'.

Weaknesses

Repeated use of basic vocabulary and conversational terms ('Folks', 'resting building').
Inaccurate collocations and word choice errors ('taste do those people carried', 'housing for people').

Lexical resource is limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and non-academic phrasing that restrict the score to Band 4.5.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 4.0

Strengths

Attempts some complex structures using relative pronouns and subordinate clauses.

Weaknesses

Persistent structural errors in indirect questions (e.g., 'what kind of taste do those people carried', 'why did they built').
Frequent tense inconsistencies and awkward passive constructions ('does the house has undergone').
Punctuation lapses, including comma splices and incorrect spacing around commas.

Grammatical control is weak, with frequent major errors across simple and complex sentences that frequently obscure meaning, supporting a Band 4.0.

Writing stats

Words: 297
Paragraphs: 4
Grammar issues: 12
Lexical suggestions: 4

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