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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

The essay addresses both views and presents a clear personal opinion, but suffers from numerous grammatical errors, awkward collocations, spelling mistakes, and repetitive sente...

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Prompt

These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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There is no denying the fact that studying is something crucial for students. While it is a commonly held belief that by some that it is better to learn online rather than attending classes, there is aslo an argument that studying in campus it is much better, and has it is own advantages. This essay will analyse this topic from both points and express my opinion.

On one hand, some people believe that online learning offer several benefits for the students. In other words, students now can study through online platforms, videos, and educational programs. They do not need to tavel every day to university or school. Students now can attend their classes in thier home, without being dressed well. Which bring comfortable, and gives beace of mindes.

In addition, online leactures is often cheap and does not require large amount of money.For example, individuals do not need to worry to pay for housing, public transportation, and expensive books. Which attract large number of people from different countries. Also sometimes universiteis offer free educational programs.

On the other hand, others argue that learnesr should attend their courses in the faculty. It is also possible to say that schools can offer mixed- learning, combining face-to-face classes with online leactures. Moreover, some people understand the information when they interact directly with teachers, and classmates. Furthermore, teachers can make the lessons more attractive, by offering online groups disscusing. For instance, students can work together in project, even if they are not in the same place. This will improve social skills and teamwoork.

In conclusion, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, I tend to believe that both of the methods are good, and learning by the internert can make the work faster, and solve difficult questions. Also, by online lessons individuals can access information more easily, which save time and effort.

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Band & CEFR

Band 5.0

CEFR B1 · High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses both views and presents a clear personal opinion, but suffers from numerous grammatical errors, awkward collocations, spelling mistakes, and repetitive sentence structures. The lexical range is limited, and several sentences are fragmented or ungrammatical, particularly involving relative clauses and prepositional phrases.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 5.5

Strengths

  • Addresses both sides of the debate regarding online versus university-based courses.
  • Presents a clear personal position in the introduction and concludes with a summary of the stance.

Weaknesses

  • Arguments are somewhat underdeveloped and rely on general statements rather than deep analytical reasoning.
  • Body paragraphs contain some repetitive assertions regarding convenience and cost.

The candidate addresses all parts of the prompt and maintains a recognizable position throughout, satisfying the requirements for Band 5.5 in Task Response.

Coherence & Cohesion 5.0

Strengths

  • Paragraphs are clearly demarcated with traditional transitional markers such as 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand'.

Weaknesses

  • Overuse of simple mechanical linkers ('In addition', 'Also', 'Furthermore').
  • Paragraph internal cohesion is disrupted by frequent sentence fragments and awkward relative clauses.

Information is arranged with some overall progression, but cohesive devices are sometimes faulty or mechanical, and referencing is occasionally unclear.

Lexical Resource 5.0

Strengths

  • Uses basic topic-related vocabulary such as 'educational programs', 'platforms', and 'university'.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent spelling errors ('aslo', 'tavel', 'thier', 'beace', 'mindes', 'leactures', 'universiteis', 'learnesr') and word formation slips.
  • Limited lexical range with repetitive use of basic terms and unnatural collocations ('studying in campus', 'working together in project').

The vocabulary is limited and recurrent errors in spelling and word choice impede smooth reading, placing lexical resource at Band 5.0.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 4.5

Strengths

  • Attempts some complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions ('While it is...', 'even if they are...').

Weaknesses

  • Frequent grammatical errors including subject-verb agreement mismatches ('online leactures is'), article misuse ('studying in campus'), and sentence fragments ('Which bring comfortable...').
  • Widespread control issues across simple and complex structures.

Errors are frequent and occasionally cause strain for the reader, with simple sentences often more reliable than attempted complex structures, justifying a Band 4.5.

Writing stats

Words
311
Paragraphs
5
Grammar issues
11
Lexical suggestions
4
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