← Back to examples
Band 7.5CEFR C1254 words

You recently visited a local park with your family. Write a letter to the park manager

The letter maintains a consistent, polite, and formal register appropriate for General Training Task 1. It successfully addresses all prompt bullet points, provides specific det...

IELTS WritingCEFR C1Checked

Prompt

You recently visited a local park with your family. Write a letter to the park manager

Essay review

Annotated essay

Interactive

Dear Park Manager,

I am writing to you about my recent visit to Greenfield Park with my family last Saturday. We really enjoyed spending the afternoon there, and I wanted to share some feedback with you about our experience.

There were several things that we thought were very good. The open grass areas were clean and well maintained, and my children had a wonderful time running around and playing. The benches and picnic tables were also in good condition, which made it very comfortable for us to sit and have lunch together.

However, I would like to bring a few issues to your attention as well. The main problem we noticed was that the public toilets near the east entrance were not clean and one of them was out of order. This was quite inconvenient, especially as we had young children with us. I would be grateful if you could ensure that these facilities are cleaned and repaired more regularly.

We also noticed that some of the playground equipment appeared to be quite old and possibly unsafe for younger children. One of the swings had a broken chain, and I think it would be a good idea to inspect the playground and replace any equipment that is damaged.

Overall, it is a lovely park and we will definitely come back again. I hope my comments are helpful, and I look forward to seeing improvements on our next visit.

Thank you very much for your time and attention to this matter.

Yours sincerely, M. Johnson

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 7.5

CEFR C1 · High

Assessment summary

The letter maintains a consistent, polite, and formal register appropriate for General Training Task 1. It successfully addresses all prompt bullet points, provides specific details, and is organised into clear paragraphs with natural cohesive flow. Lexical and grammatical control is high with only minor punctuation or article slips.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 8.0

Strengths

  • Fully addresses all parts of the prompt, including the visit details, positive feedback, and specific issues.
  • Maintains a consistent, appropriate tone and polite, purposeful purpose throughout.

Weaknesses

    The response covers all aspects of the task completely, setting out the purpose of the letter, sharing positive aspects, reporting issues constructively, and concluding with an appropriate forward-looking remark.

    Coherence & Cohesion 8.0

    Strengths

    • Paragraphs are logically structured, moving from introduction and praise to specific complaints and a positive conclusion.
    • Seamless transitions and appropriate referencing maintain smooth progression.

    Weaknesses

      The letter flows logically with clear paragraph breaks separating positive observations from areas needing improvement.

      Lexical Resource 7.5

      Strengths

      • Uses precise vocabulary such as 'well maintained', 'inconvenient', and 'inspect the playground'.
      • Appropriate formal register and consistent vocabulary choices.

      Weaknesses

      • Relies slightly on common descriptive adjectives ('very good', 'lovely park') rather than advanced academic collocations.

      Vocabulary is accurate and natural for a formal complaint/feedback letter, though it does not reach the highest tier of sophisticated academic phrasing.

      Grammar Range & Accuracy 7.5

      Strengths

      • Wide variety of complex sentences used accurately, such as relative clauses ('which made it very comfortable') and conditional structures.
      • High percentage of error-free clauses.

      Weaknesses

      • Minor punctuation lapses in the closing formula.

      Grammar and sentence structures are handled with a high degree of flexibility and control, with only a single minor formatting slip in the sign-off.

      Writing stats

      Words
      254
      Paragraphs
      8
      Grammar issues
      0
      Lexical suggestions
      3
      ← Back to all examples